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Examples are important in writing because they help illustrate the point a writer is trying to make. Use at least one of this module’s readings (**from list on page four of module lecture) to explain the importance of using examples when writing.
Your answer should consist of a well-developed paragraph or two, which means the first sentence should answer the question(s) (i.e., topic sentence), and the following sentences should support the topic sentence. The paragraph(s) should be unified and coherent with specific supporting details or examples from the story. The sentences should be clear, concise, and arranged in a logical order. Transitions, pronouns, and repetition should be used to provide coherence. The paragraph(s) should follow adefinition format.
Readings lists are given below: Use one reading from the list. You can google about those readings. You will find the article.
At least one of the following texts from the Blair Reader:
“The Gayest One” by Brett Krutzsch
“The Curious Grammar of Police Shootings” by Radley Balko
“Sexism in English: Embodiment and Language” by Alleen Pace Nilsen
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Frederick Mezzatesta posted Aug 10, 2020 3:54 PM
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In the article,Sexism in English: Embodiment & Languageby Aileen Pace Nilsen, she chose to give quite a large number of examples and some personal experiences to prove her point regarding the differences between how men and woman are treated differently. She explained that once she returned to the United States from Afghanistan, she decided to be a part of the feminist movement and would begin to study the cultural biases between both sexes in American English. Nilsen was an English major during college and used this knowledge to assist her in the movement by actively studying the English language to locate as many examples of sexism that she could find. She wrote down every example of sexism that she found on note cards that eventually was enough to fill up two shoes boxes.
The examples that Nilsen provided were evidence-based facts so that the reader can understand the reality of sexism and how differently women are treated from men. She provided titles and their meanings and how differently they can be used or interpreted. She provided words along with the meanings, and examples of how they are used differently towards men and women. All of these examples provided the proof of how sexism is an actual reality and how it continues over the years with men in higher regard than women have ever been. Women have never been treated as equals and it shows through her examples. The examples used in this article made the point clear that sexism is a problem.
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Casey O’Shaughnessy posted Aug 11, 2020 5:22 PM
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Sexism in English: Embodiment and Language written by Allen Pace Nilsen was filled with many different examples. Aileen Pace Nilsen uses multiple examples, such as her own personal experience to discuss the treatment of men and women. She believes that men and women are treated differently and uses the examples to support that argument. The author wanted to study men and women in English. Allen went on to explain her background, which was an English major in college and she used this to her advantage when studying both sexes. She sees the study of language as one the most important factors that impacts social problems. Allen Pace Nilsen believes that society’s values are intertwined with language, which results in differing views on gender.
Allen Pace Nilsen provided many examples, but one that stood out to me most was her opinion on the word Amazon. She expresses her frustration with this word because it is offensive to women. Nilsen does not agree with the use of this word towards women because it means without breast in the Greek language. In her opinion this word is used against women to say that they should sell their body parts, such as breasts to perform roles usually done by men. Another word she had a problem with was teats because it also referred to womens breasts. Nislen believes this word brings unnecessary attention to women and their body. Allen Pace Nilsen sees this as gender inequality and is not supportive of it.
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Charles Files posted Aug 11, 2020 10:42 PM
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In The Gayest One by Brett Krutzch, the author expressed his frustrations with immediately being identified as homosexual in various social settings. Without the use of examples, Krutzch may not have been able to effectively support his position.
Krutzch provided multiple examples to support the basis for his frustrations. He did this by using previous events that best supported his points. Of these events, he sorted out the details and presented them in an organized manner.
The examples Krutzch uses are examples from his own experiences, as opposed to examples from outside sources. The examples of his own experiences kept the reader interested while supporting his statements.
The number of examples he used was proportionate to the points he was making. Had he used too many or not enough examples, the reader could have lost interest.
Without the use of examples, the reader may have exhibited difficulty understanding where Krutzch was coming from. Krutzch provided very specific, non-fictional situations that allowed the reader to relate to him and understand what he meant by immediately being identified as homosexual. He also offered examples of his daily lifestyle which he felt do not support the idea that he is The Gayest One in the situations he offered as examples.
Krutzch had the challenge of drawing his readers into a situation that may not be incredibly common. He was able to do so through his use of examples of his own experiences. This successfully held the reader’s interest while simultaneously supporting his arguments. Throughout his writing Brett Krutzsch has recounted his personal experiences whereby he was labelled as being the Gayest One by his colleagues. He has utilized examples throughout his narrative for a variety of reasons. He has utilized evidence from his personal life which the reader can relate to therefore enhancing the quality of his essay significantly. For instance, Brett has recounted that as a boy growing up in Indiana he was constantly taunted for talking like a girl. He prayed for his voice to break which did not happen even after reaching puberty. His voice was always a reminder that he was different from other men, making him feel like a lesser man.
Examples are also a vital part of a narrative as they leave something for the reader to relate to, thus giving the reader a better chance of understanding and relating to the writer. For instance, Brett has allowed the reader to understand the circumstances why he is considered the gayest person within his department despite there being more than ten gay men within his division. He has described that he is least likely to pass as straight as he buys expensive Kiehls skincare products and wears formfitting Burberry polos. In conclusion, examples and evidence in writing provide a more realistic opinion as opposed to fictional writing. For example, Brett has highlighted that while he was walking down the streets with his female friend Lauren, even the homeless man had enough gay-dar to know he wasnt heterosexual when he asked Lauren if they could get married. Here is the breakdown of your earned points for the assignment and applicable comments. Please let me know if you have any questions about the feedback on your assignment. Maximum possible points for the assignment: 150 Total points earned for the assignment less any late penalty (rounded): 118 – Task Requirements points earned: 32.93 out of 37 – Demonstration and application of knowledge points earned: 65.57 out of 83 – Academic writing and format points earned: 19.5 out of 30 – Late Penalty (0%) points subtracted: (0) Strengths: You presented information on sexual harassment and why it is good to have a policy in place. Opportunities for improvement: However, there were more requirements such as a discussion on the differences between mediation and litigation and which is better for the company along with a few other details. Be sure to follow the listing of requirements for the assignment. Additional comments: Let me know if you have any questions.
