Final Draft Essay In my first draft I have made a lot of mistakes. and my peer wrote some comments on It. so, I need the final draft to be finished b

Final Draft Essay
In my first draft I have made a lot of mistakes. and my peer wrote some comments on It. so, I need the final draft to be finished by applying the comments firstly.

Secondl, There is an instruction file please write an essay depending on those instructions even if you had to change the whole essay. I just want it to be a good essay please.

aling with the files is King Luthers speech (written). But in case you want to watch the video… this is the link:

please do your best.
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Name: Sultan Al Balushi 017578871
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I Have a Dream Speech
28th August, 1963, Dr. Martin Luther King, Jr gave a speech I
Have a Dream in Washington D.C. The subject of the speech is
centralized on freedom and justice for all Americans most
specifically the Negros. The speech is told to thousands of
Americans who had marched to Washington for the
demonstration of freedom and justice.
Dr. Luther thing explains when the emancipation decree had
been signed it went down as elements of hope to many black
slaves who had been under captivity of injustice and served as
morning light form darkness. However, in a century later, the
same black people are living high levels of poverty and
discrimination despite a long time having passed since
Independence Day.
Martin offers hope to the people, a hope based on a dream that
justice will be evident in different states where sons of slaves
and sons of their masters will be able to enjoy staying together.
A moment where even his own children will be judged based on
character than the skin color. States like Alabama, Mississippi
and Georgia will have equality despite having racism. Dr. Luther
ask people to have faith that one day people will be able to
change the shape the way people work and express things with
togetherness, work together, go to jail together and even fight
for freedom together. He inspires people into getting anew
meaning to the county song. He inspires people to view America
and a great nation in which from all areas freedom rings, from
hilltops of Hampshire to Pennsylvania through California and
Colorado. Let freedom ring, is the word most strengthened in his
last part of the speech where all people no matter their religion
be it Jews or gentiles or even Catholics or even Protestants will
be able to feel free at last, when everyone will feel free.

9/2/20, 5:01 AM
Page 1 of 1 “I HAVE A DREAM …”

(Copyright 1963, MARTIN LtrTHER KING, JR.)

Speooh by the Rev. MARTIN LuTHER KING
At the “March on vYashington”

I am happy to join with you today in what will go down
in history as the greatest demonstration for freedom in
the history of our nation.

Five ~core years ago a great American in whose sym
holic shadow we stand today signed the Emancipation
Proclamation. This momen:tous cleeree is a great beacon
light of hope to millions of Negro slaves who had been
~e.arrd in the flames o[ withering injushcc. It came as a
joyous daybre,ak to end the long night of their captivity.
But 100 years late.rial prospcrity. Out> hundred years later the
~egro is still larugui~hed iu the comer~s o.f American
~oci. ety and find;:; himself in exile in his own land. So
wo ”’<' come hf'rP torlay to r1r.amatize a s,hameful condition. In a sense we've come to our nation's capital to cash a eheck. Whrn the a. reb it ects of our Re:publie wrote the magnificent. wonls of the Constitution a.nd the Declaration o1 Independence, they were signing a promiss'Clr citi7.ens of co.Jo,r arr concP:rned. Instead of

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honoring ih1s sacn’d ohli,gation, America ha.s given the
Nngro p0ople a bad check, a check which has come back
marked ”insufficient fn nds.”

But we refus.e to helieve that the bank of justice is
bankrupt. We rp.fnse to belie~~ t.ha.t there are insufficient
fuwls in the grea.t vaults of opportunity orf this nation.
So we’ve come to cash this check, a check that will give
ns upon oemand the rirhes of freedom and the security of
justice.

Ve haYe a.bo come to this hallowed spot to remind
Ame.rica of the fipJce urgency of now. ‘l’hi:-; is no time to
l’llgagc in the luxury of cooling off or to t.ake the tran
quilizing dmg of graduali::;m. Now is the time to make
real the promi~rs of democracy. Now is the time to rise
from the dark nnll clrsolate valley of segregation to the
,.unlit path of racial justise who hope
that tl1e X egro needed to hlow off steam and will now be
l’Olltent will hae a ruoP awakening if the na:tion return1’1
to bu,;ine~;.; as usua.I.

‘l’here will be 11eitht’T rest nor tranquility in Ame.rica
until the Negro i~ granted his citizenship rights. The
whirlwinds of revolt will continue to shake the founda
tions of onr nation until the bright days of justice emerge.

(Copyright 101i3, MARTI:-< Lt:THFR KIKc , JR.) http:disconte.nt 3 And that is something that I mus.t say to my pBople who ~tand o.n the worn threshold whieh leads into the palace of justice. In the proce ss of gaining our rightful place we must not he guilty of wrongful deeds. Let us not "eek to sati:sfy our thirst for freedom by drinking from the cup of biMen:les,s a.nd hatred. Ve must forever conduct our s.truggle on the high plane of dignity and diseiplin e. Ye must not allow our crea tive protests to degen erate into physical violence. Again and again we mus t ri se to the maje,stic heights of meding physical fo.rce wi.th soul for-ce. rl'he marvelous new mili tancy whi-ch has cn.gulfE>d the Negro community must not
lead us to distrust all white people, for many o[ our white
hrotlwrs, as evidcnccJ by their prese.nce here today, have
eome to realize tha.t th eir destiny is tied up with our
de~tiny.

They have come to re.alize that their freedom is in
exttieably hound t.o o~1r fre.room. \’e cannot walk alone.
And as we walk we must make the pledge t~hat we shall
always march ahcarl We cannot turn hack. There are
those who are .asking the rlevotees of civil rights, “When
will you be sa.t.isfied 1” Ve can never be satisfied as ll’t.y, of thee I ~ing. Land where my
fathers died, land of th<.' pilgrim ' s pride, from every mountain side, let. fr eedom ring.'' And if America is to he a. great nation , this mn ::..t become true. So let freedom ring from tlH' prodigious hilltops of New Hampshire. Let freedom ring from the mighty mountains of New (Copyright 1963, MARTIN LunrER KING , JR.) 6 York. Let freooom ring from the heightening Alleghenies of Pennsylvania. Let freedom ring from t.hB snowcapped Rookies of Colorado. Let freedom ring from the curva eeous s.lopes of California. But not only that. Let freedom ring from Stone Moun tain of Georgia. Let freedom ring from Lookout Moun tain of Tennessee. Let freedom ring from every hill and molehill of M~ssissippi, from every mountain side. Let freedom ring . . . When we allow freedom to ring-when we let it ring from every city and eYery hamlet, from every state and every city, we will be able to speed up that day when all (If God's children, black men and white men, Jews and G(>.nt.iles, Prot.B.stants and Catholics, will be able to join
hands and sing in the words of the old Negro spiritual,
“FI’ee at last, Free at last, Great God a-mighty, “Ve are
free at la.st.”

(Copyright 1963, MARTIN LuTHER KING, JR.) AFRS 100B

Summary Assignment

Summary A condensed version of an original text.
As your first formal essay, the Summary Assignment will highlight your ability to connect to a text by identifying and summarizing claims made by Dr. Martin Luther King, Jr. in his I Have a Dream speech. Although you will model the organization and structure of the speech, you will use your own terms and employ your own voice to articulate the speechs claims and supporting evidence.

Your charge is to write a brief one-page, single-spaced summary, restating the main ideas of the speech. A copy of the speech can be accessed in Call and Response: Key Debates in African American Studies.
The aim of this assignment is to thoroughly comprehend a text and to translate the essential meaning of the text into terms accessible to others.
In your introduction, identify the author, subject, audience, and purpose.

Strategies:

Identify the main claims in the text and restate them near the start of your summary.

Paraphrase the supporting points, examples, and details; use a thesaurus to find synonyms for key words.

Condense the original text, keeping your writing within one single-spaced page.

Be objective rather than critical try to narrow down the original, without adding editorial comments.

Use verbs that capture the authors argument and analysis.

This essay should be formatted in MLA style, i.e., typed, *single-spaced, 1 page in length, with one-inch margins.

The first draft of this assignment is due September 2nd at the beginning of class. Please have a typed copy of draft available to share with a classmate and post a copy to the Dropbox on Beachboard prior to the start of class. This draft should be approximately page in length.

The final draft of this assignment is due September 9th at the beginning of class. Please post a copy to Dropbox on BeachBoard prior to the start of class. This draft should be 1 full page in length and single spaced.

“I Have a Dream,” Address Delivered at the March on Washington for Jobs and Freedom

Author:

King, Martin Luther, Jr. (Southern Christian Leadership Conference)

Date:

August 28, 1963

Location:

Washington, D.C.

Genre:

Audio

Speech

Topic:

March on Washington for Jobs and Freedom, 1963

Audio:

Listen to Audio

Details

In his iconic speech at the Lincoln Memorial for the 1963 March on Washington for Jobs and Freedom, King urged America to “make real the promises of democracy.” King synthesized portions of his earlier speeches to capture both the necessity for change and the potential for hope in American society.

I am happy to join with you today in what will go down in history as the greatest demonstration for freedom in the history of our nation. [applause]

Five score years ago, a great American, in whose symbolic shadow we stand today, signed the Emancipation Proclamation. This momentous decree came as a great beacon light of hope to millions of Negro slaves [Audience:] (Yeah) who had been seared in the flames of withering injustice. It came as a joyous daybreak to end the long night of their captivity. (Hmm)

But one hundred years later (All right), the Negro still is not free. (My Lord, Yeah) One hundred years later, the life of the Negro is still sadly crippled by the manacles of segregation and the chains of discrimination. (Hmm) One hundred years later (All right), the Negro lives on a lonely island of poverty in the midst of a vast ocean of material prosperity. One hundred years later (My Lord) [applause], the Negro is still languished in the corners of American society and finds himself in exile in his own land. (Yes, yes) And so weve come here today to dramatize a shameful condition.

In a sense weve come to our nations capital to cash a check. When the architects of our republic wrote the magnificent words of the Constitution and the Declaration of Independence (Yeah), they were signing a promissory note to which every American was to fall heir. This note was a promise that all men, yes, black men as well as white men (My Lord), would be guaranteed the unalienable rights of life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness. It is obvious today that America has defaulted on this promissory note insofar as her citizens of color are concerned. (My Lord) Instead of honoring this sacred obligation, America has given the Negro people a bad check, a check which has come back marked insufficient funds. [enthusiastic applause] (My Lord, Lead on, Speech, speech)

But we refuse to believe that the bank of justice is bankrupt. (My Lord) [laughter] (No, no) We refuse to believe that there are insufficient funds in the great vaults of opportunity of this nation. (Sure enough) And so weve come to cash this check (Yes), a check that will give us upon demand the riches of freedom (Yes) and the security of justice. (Yes Lord) [enthusiastic applause]

We have also come to this hallowed spot (My Lord) to remind America of the fierce urgency of now. (Mhm) This is no time (My Lord) to engage in the luxury of cooling off or to take the tranquilizing drug of gradualism. [applause] (Yes, Speak on it!) Now is the time (Yes it is) to make real the promises of democracy. (My Lord) Now is the time to rise from the dark and desolate valley of segregation to the sunlit path of racial justice. Now is the time [applause] to lift our nation from the quicksands of racial injustice to the solid rock of brotherhood. Now is the time (Yes) [applause] (Now) to make justice a reality for all of Gods children.

It would be fatal for the nation to overlook the urgency of the moment. This sweltering summer of the Negros legitimate discontent (Yes) will not pass until there is an invigorating autumn of freedom and equality. (My Lord) 1963 is not an end, but a beginning. (Yes) And those who hope that the Negro needed to blow off steam and will now be content will have a rude awakening if the nation returns to business as usual. [enthusiastic applause] There will be neither rest nor tranquility in America until the Negro is granted his citizenship rights. The whirlwinds of revolt will continue to shake the foundations of our nation until the bright day of justice emerges.

But there is something that I must say to my people, who stand on the warm threshold which leads into the palace of justice: in the process of gaining our rightful place, we must not be guilty of wrongful deeds. Let us not seek to satisfy our thirst for freedom by drinking from the cup of bitterness and hatred. (My Lord, No, no, no, no) [applause] We must forever conduct our struggle on the high plane of dignity and discipline. We must not allow our creative protest to degenerate into physical violence. (My Lord) Again and again (No, no), we must rise to the majestic heights (Yes) of meeting physical force with soul force. (My Lord) The marvelous new militancy which has engulfed the Negro community must not lead us to a distrust of all white people (Hmm), for many of our white brothers, as evidenced by their presence here today, have come to realize that their destiny is tied up with our destiny [sustained applause], and they have come to realize that their freedom is inextricably bound to our freedom. We cannot walk alone.

And as we walk, we must make the pledge that we shall always march ahead. We cannot turn back. There are those who are asking the devotees of civil rights, When will you be satisfied? (Never) We can never be satisfied as long as the Negro is the victim of the unspeakable horrors of police brutality. (Yes) We can never be satisfied [applause] as long as our bodies, heavy with the fatigue of travel, cannot gain lodging in the motels of the highways and the hotels of the cities. [applause] We cannot be satisfied as long as the Negros basic mobility is from a smaller ghetto to a larger one. (Yes) We can never be satisfied as long as our children are stripped of their selfhood and robbed of their dignity by signs stating for whites only. [applause] (Yes, Hallelujah) We cannot be satisfied as long as a Negro in Mississippi cannot vote and a Negro in New York believes he has nothing for which to vote. (Yeah, Thats right, Lets go) [applause] No, no, we are not satisfied and we will not be satisfied until justice rolls down like waters (Yes) and righteousness like a mighty stream. [applause] (Lets go, Tell it)

I am not unmindful that some of you have come here out of great trials and tribulations. (My Lord) Some of you have come fresh from narrow jail cells. (My Lord, Thats right) Some of you have come from areas where your quest for freedom left you battered by the storms of persecution (Yeah, Yes) and staggered by the winds of police brutality. You have been the veterans of creative suffering. Continue to work with the faith (Hmm) that unearned suffering is redemptive. Go back to Mississippi (Yeah), go back to Alabama, go back to South Carolina, go back to Georgia, go back to Louisiana, go back to the slums and ghettos of our northern cities (Yes), knowing that somehow this situation can and will be changed. (Yes) Let us not wallow in the valley of despair. (My Lord)

I say to you today, my friends [applause], so even though we face the difficulties of today and tomorrow (Uh-huh), I still have a dream. (Yes) It is a dream deeply rooted in the American dream. (Yes)

I have a dream (Mhm) that one day (Yes) this nation will rise up and live out the true meaning of its creed (Hah): We hold these truths to be self-evident, that all men are created equal. (Yeah, Uh-huh, Hear hear) [applause]

I have a dream that one day on the red hills of Georgia (Yes, Talk), the sons of former slaves and the sons of former slave owners will be able to sit down together at the table of brotherhood.

I have a dream (Yes) [applause] that one day even the state of Mississippi, a state sweltering with the heat of injustice (Yeah), sweltering with the heat of oppression (Mhm), will be transformed into an oasis of freedom and justice.

I have a dream (Yeah) [applause] that my four little children (Well) will one day live in a nation where they will not be judged by the color of their skin but by the content of their character. (My Lord) I have a dream today. [enthusiastic applause]

I have a dream that one day down in Alabama, with its vicious racists (Yes, Yeah), with its governor having his lips dripping with the words of interposition and nullification (Yes), one day right there in Alabama little black boys and black girls will be able to join hands with little white boys and white girls as sisters and brothers. I have a dream today. [applause] (God help him, Preach)

I have a dream that one day every valley shall be exalted (Yes), every hill and mountain shall be made low, the rough places will be made plain (Yes), and the crooked places will be made straight (Yes), and the glory of the Lord shall be revealed [cheering], and all flesh shall see it together. (Yes Lord)

This is our hope. (Yes, Yes) This is the faith that I go back to the South with. (Yes) With this faith (My Lord) we will be able to hew out of the mountain of despair a stone of hope. (Yes, All right) With this faith (Yes) we will be able to transform the jangling discords of our nation (Yes) into a beautiful symphony of brotherhood. (Talk about it) With this faith (Yes, My Lord) we will be able to work together, to pray together, to struggle together, to go to jail together (Yes), to stand up for freedom together (Yeah), knowing that we will be free one day. [sustained applause]

This will be the day, this will be the day when all of Gods children (Yes, Yeah) will be able to sing with new meaning: My country, tis of thee (Yeah, Yes), sweet land of liberty, of thee I sing. (Oh yes) Land where my fathers died, land of the pilgrims pride (Yeah), from every mountainside, let freedom ring! (Yeah)

And if America is to be a great nation (Yes), this must become true. So let freedom ring (Yes, Amen) from the prodigious hilltops of New Hampshire. (Uh-huh) Let freedom ring from the mighty mountains of New York. Let freedom ring from the heightening Alleghenies of Pennsylvania. (Yes, all right) Let freedom ring (Yes) from the snow-capped Rockies of Colorado. (Well) Let freedom ring from the curvaceous slopes of California. (Yes) But not only that: (No) Let freedom ring from Stone Mountain of Georgia. [cheering] (Yeah, Oh yes, Lord) Let freedom ring from Lookout Mountain of Tennessee. (Yes) Let freedom ring from every hill and molehill of Mississippi. (Yes) Fromeverymountainside (Yeah) [sustained applause], let freedom ring.

And when this happens [applause] (Let it ring, Let it ring), and when we allow freedom ring (Let it ring), when we let it ring from every village and every hamlet, from every state and every city (Yes Lord), we will be able to speed up that day when all of Gods children (Yeah), black men (Yeah) and white men (Yeah), Jews and Gentiles, Protestants and Catholics (Yes), will be able to join hands and sing in the words of the old Negro spiritual: Free at last! (Yes) Free at last! Thank God Almighty, we are free at last! [enthusiastic applause]

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MLKEC-INP, Martin Luther King, Jr. Estate Collection, In Private Hands

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1. The essay is single-spaced, has one-inch margins, is one full page in length, and a Peer Review is attached.

2. There are no major grammatical errors that interfere with the readers understanding of this written work.

3. Sentences are effective with precise word choices that create variety, emphasis and interest.

4. Punctuation and spelling are appropriate for an academic audience.

5. There are no quotations in this essay paraphrasing only.

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1. The introduction engages the reader with an interesting opening that identifies the source and explains the topic.

2. The author conveys the main purpose, thesis, or claim of the source.

3. The author discusses the key (major) elements of the source.

4. The author is objective rather than critical. There are no opinions or personal commentary.

5. The author links material together by following the organizational pattern of the source.

6. The author introduces strong topic sentences and uses good transitions throughout the summary.

7. Paragraphs remain focused, support the claim, and do not deviate from the sources main ideas, key points and supporting details.

8. Overall, the summary is well-developed and appropriate.

Grade: Writer:Sultan Al Balushi
Reader:David Doan

Peer Review Worksheet Essay One Summary of I Have a Dream
Speech

Read the draft through quickly; then read it again with the following points in mind. Write
a full comment for questions. Do not write yes or no responsesgive detailed responses.

Write a brief narrative (3-4 sentences) that outlines your first impression of the draft.
It was not in proper MLA format. It did not list the professor, date, or class. It also did not have a heading on the
top right. Also, indent before every paragraph. The thesis was not clear but the body was off.

Indicate what you like about the draft (positive/encouraging feedback). What parts of the summary are interesting
and/or new to you?

I like how the body paragraph restates the points that Dr. King makes in his speech.

Comment specifically on the title and introduction: What is effective about it? Does it draw you into the paper?
What suggestions can you make to improve the introduction?

It does not draw me into the paper. There was no hook to draw the reader in. Also, the title was very general and
not unique.

What do you think is the authors main point? And consider whether the thesis and the paper as a whole
addresses the issue/topic of the assignment. How could the thesis be expressed more clearly?

The thesis stated was seemingly about the subject of the speech was freedom and justice. However, the body
paragraphs covered the past present and future of his speech. Like the Emancipation Proclamation to the current
state of African Americans to the future and his dreams for America.

In the main body of the paper, are there parts that are confusing or seem to lose focus? Where would you like more

details or examples to help you see what the author means? What parts could use more explanations or
definitions? (note the number of the paragraph and your suggestions)

On the first body paragraph, you stated the “emancipation degree”. You can just state Emancipation
Proclamation. Also, you stated “Independence Day” when it was actually the Civil War.

How clear is the writing at the sentence level? If there are places that seem wordy or unclear, how might the author

revise to address those problems? (also consider grammatical and mechanical issues)

You directly restated the point of Dr. King on you second body paragraph. A little bit to directly. However for the
first body paragraph don’t try to rephrase actual historic events just state them. I would change the thesis to cover
these body paragraphs.

Does the Conclusion sum up, without being repetitive, the major points/conclusions of the paper? To what extent

does it offer a final point or thought for closure on the subject? What questions do you have that the paper does
not address?

I can’t spot the conclusion because there is not any indentation for each paragraph. So make sure you indent and
bring closure to your thesis by rephrasing the inro.

Based on your assessment of the paper, what are the three most important issues the student should address to

improve the paper? (Be specific)

Make a better thesis. one that covers all the topics of your body paragraphs. Make sure you essay is in MLA.
There is lack of indentation in your paragraphs and also a work cited page. Make a conclusion that brings closure,
that also resates the inroduction and thesis.