E121 Week 5 – Final Paper
In Week 3, you wrote the rough draft of your Critical Response Essay in which you stated your critical response to one of the available library essays. This week you will complete and revise this draft and turn in your final essay.
As you are writing this essay, incorporate your instructors feedback from your Week 3 draft, Ashford Writing Center feedback, applicable peer reviews, and other activities completed throughout this course. Expand upon the prewriting done in the discussion forum for the past five weeks to provide specific details about the reading you selected, the topic that it explores, and your critical response to that topic.
In your paper,
Build on your Outline and Rough Draft by responding to the main points of your selected essay with a clear argument.
Revise and edit previous work, incorporating instructor feedback from previous submissions in the course.
Support your response with examples from the selected essay and include at least one quote and one paraphrase (a total of two citations) in APA format.
State specific details about the essay you selected, the topic that it explores, and your critical response to that topic.
Produce academic argumentative writing using appropriate tone, style, and citation format as well as correct grammar, spelling, and sentence mechanics.
Include the structural components of academic writing: an introduction with a thesis, support paragraphs, and a conclusion.
The Final Critical Response Essay
Must be 4-5 properly-formatted pages or 1,000-1,250 words (not including title and references pages) and formatted according to APA style as outlined in the Universitys Writing Centers APA style (Links to an external resource).
Must include a separate title page with the following:
o Title of essay
o Students name
o Course name and number
o Instructors name
o Date submitted
o For further assistance with the formatting and the title page, refer to APA Formating for Word 2013 (Links to an external source).
Must utilize academic voice. See the Academic Voice (Links to an external site) resource for additional guidance.
Must include a clear thesis statement. For more information about writing thesis statements, visit the University Writing Center (Links to an external site) and review Chapters 4 and 5 of Essentials of College Writing.
Must include an introduction and conclusion paragraph. Your introduction paragraph needs to end with a clear thesis statement that indicates the purpose of your paper.
o For assistance on writing Introductions and Conclusions (Links to an external site) as well as Writing a Thesis Statement (Links to an external site) , refer to the Universitys Writing Center resources.
Must use at least 1 credible source in addition to the course text.
o The Scholarly, Peer-Reviewed, and Other Credible Sources (Links to an external site) table offers additional guidance on appropriate source types. If you have questions about whether a specific source is appropriate for this assignment, please contact your instructor. Your instructor has the final say about the appropriateness of a specific source for a particular assignment.
Must document any information used from sources in APA style as outlined in the Ashford Writing Centers Citing within your paper (Links to an external site) guide.
Must include a separate references page that is formatted according to APA style as outlined in the Ashford Writing Center. See the Formatting Your Reference Lists (Links to an external site) resource in the Ashford Writing Center for specifications.
Running head: KENTUCKY WRITERS 1
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Kentucky Writers
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Introduction and Thesis
I chose the article Kentucky Writers in Kentucky Wendell Berry. According to the article, writing culture in Kentucky has not developed or is not well established. There is fragmentation associated with the country, and public silence is a common thing. Although Kentucky has enough writers and books, the overall human culture is deplorable. According to the author, enhancing the writing culture needs quality and courageous writers of the books and readers to read and criticize the books. The thesis statement of the essay is that Kentucky does not have sustainable human culture because very few books are reviewed in Kentucky, none of the books published in Kentucky contributes to public discussion, and there is significant public silence.
The essay is an amazing story full of passion and heart. It shows Berrys true dedication towards writing by deciding to leave New York and going back to his home country, Kentucky. There are many successful writers from and in New York unlike Kentucky, but Berry took it upon himself to make a difference in his home country. Absolutely, Berry making it to the Kentucky hall of fame and being the only writer is a great accomplishment. The essay does not contain chapters or headings, making it a little bit hard to read, but it is interesting and has great content.
I think the essay is an excellent piece regarding how local authors can enhance a unique perspective regarding public matters in their countries. I think Berry and other Kentucky writers are hardly making use of their powerful tools to address different public matters. They can reach many people in the state through their writing and evoke different reactions that will enhance further writing. I believe Kentucky citizens would hardly rely on the Internet for various things regarding the state if writers critically put these things into writing.
However, the Internet is also another way of making these writers viral and popular. It provides great exposure to the books to the people. If Kentucky writers want to bring to attention, the things happening in their country, they must work harder and smart to ensure people gain interest in books and more people venture into writing. Through the influence enhanced by books reviewed and published in Kentucky, public dialogues will strike encouraging people to contribute more to different matters of the state.
Wendell Berry focuses on the role of writers in bringing out issues to the publics attention through writing and publishing of books and other reading materials. He says, Our Constitution and Bill of Rights just to hint at an immeasurable abundance have come to us from books and from readers of books. To keep our heritage viable and transmissible will require capable writers of books, and a capable culture of literacy, however small it may have to be, (Wendell, 2015) This is a clear indication of the limited writers and books in Kentucky. Berry outlines that people lack a sense of their culture because there are not enough materials and books to expound these norms and beliefs. He also outlines how well human culture will be established in Kentucky if writers own up their role and address various public matters (Wendell, 2015). People will also start initiating public conversations based on these books which bring about social and political change in the country.
Public silence makes people forget their culture and what was initially part of them. By improving the reviewing and publishing of more books locally, Kentucky citizens will have an opportunity to acknowledge their unique culture and get awareness by having a voice to different subjects addressed by these writers. There is massive information that people need to know and understand their well-being.
This information is not going out to wider audiences in Kentucky, limiting its impact to create change or enable people to know different matters affecting or related to them. Kentucky writers should become more active and aggressive and use their space and talents to create massive awareness and if necessary, action on the issues they raise in their work. Kentucky writers should focus on enhancing and upgrading the writing and publishing industry by improving their writing work and encouraging review and publishing of books in their country to create a great writing and reading culture.
Conclusion
In conclusion, Kentucky writers should revive their writing work by reviewing and publishing books in the country. Besides, they should address various issues in the country through their books to create awareness and keep people updated on matters affecting them in different ways. They can influence Kentuckys politics by involving citizens in public issues through their writings. They should focus more on matters affecting the people and not matters on education alone. Books are a better way of addressing political issues and encouraging ongoing conversations between people.
Reference
Wendell, B. (2015). “Kentucky Writers in Kentucky” by Berry, Wendell – Appalachian Heritage, Vol. 43, Issue 1, Winter 2015 | Online Research Library: Questia. Retrieved 10 August 2020, from https://www.questia.com/magazine/1G1-471554540/kentucky-writers-in-kentucky This is a good start, so far. You have some good ideas going here in your rough draft, and you made some interesting points about your chosen essay. You also put forth a good effort on your thesis statement, in terms of its structure,but please see my comments about eliminating the “announcing” part of it and any other self-referential phrase.Also, you didn’t quite follow through on using it effectively as the organizational structure of your essay.Remember that thethree supporting points should be the basis for your body paragraphs, and that relationship should be reflected in the topic sentences for each paragraph. Topic sentences should perform three functions: state the overall main idea, cover one of the three supporting points, and act as a transition between paragraphs.II. Body paragraph 1, topic sentence 1: “Parents often have to “make it work” under difficult circumstances by being patient.III. Body para. 2, topic sentence 2: “Parents often have to “make it work” under difficult circumstances not only by being patient, but by being flexible as well.IV. Body para. 3, topic sentence 3:Parents often have to “make it work” under difficult circumstances by being patient and flexible; they also have to make the most of the resources they have available to them.In addition, you were required to use at least one outside source other than your chosen essay, so be sure to visit the Ashford Library to find more academic sources to add to your essay.In terms of academic voice, keep in mind that first and second person usage (I, me, my, us, we, our, you, etc.) is prohibited in academic writing. You must write exclusively in third person.Lastly, be sure to review the grammar, style, and proofreading errors I pointed out, and work on those moving forward. Remember that you can submit drafts of your work to the Writing Center for additional help in these areas before turning them in for a grade.Otherwise, I enjoyed reading your draft and look forward to seeing your progress!Jamie
(1.76 / 2.00); : Develops a Workable Rough Draft from the Week 2 Outline, Demonstrating Progression in the Steps of the Writing Process
Proficient – Develops a workable rough draft from the Week 2 outline. The rough draft is slightly underdeveloped, demonstrating some progression in the steps of the writing process.
(1.76 / 2.00); : States Details About What is Most Important in the Selected Reading and the Topic That it Explores
Proficient – States details about the selected reading and the topic that it explores, but not all are what is important in the reading. Minor details are missing or slightly unclear.
(3.52 / 4.00); : Composes an Argument in Response to Topic of the Selected Essay, and Supports the Response with Examples and at Least One Quote and One Paraphrase from the Selected Essay
Proficient -Composes an argument in response to topic of the selected essay, and supports the response with examples and at least one quote and one paraphrase from the selected essay. The argument is slightly underdeveloped or unclear.
(1.52 / 2.00); : Intro, Thesis, & Conclusion
Basic – The paper is organized with an introduction, thesis statement, and conclusion. The introduction, thesis statement, and/or conclusion require improvement.
(0.76 / 1.00); : Tone and Writing Style
Basic – Written work contains language that is somewhat appropriate in diction and tone according to the assignment guidelines. Academic vocabulary is somewhat integrated throughout the assignment.
(0.76 / 1.00); : Control of Grammar and Mechanics
Basic – Displays basic comprehension of grammar and spelling. Written work contains a few errors which may slightly distract the reader.
(0.88 / 1.00); : Written Communication: APA Formatting
Proficient – Exhibits APA formatting throughout the paper. However, layout contains a few minor errors.
(1.00 / 1.00); : Written Communication: Page Requirement
Distinguished – The length of the paper is equivalent to the required number of correctly formatted pages.
(0.64 / 1.00); : Written Communication: Resource Requirement
Below Expectations – Uses an inadequate number of sources that provide little or no support for ideas. Sources used may not be scholarly. Most sources on the reference page are not used within the body of the assignment. Citations are not formatted correctly.
Overall Score: 12.60 / 15.00Overall Grade: 12.6
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his is a good start, so far. You have some good ideas going here in your rough draft,
and you made some interesting points about your chosen essay. You also
put forth a
good effort on your thesis statement, in terms of its structure,but please see my
comments about eliminating the “announcing” part of it and any other self
–
referential
phrase.
Also, you didn’t quite follow through on using it effectively as th
e
organizational structure of your essay.
Remember that the
three supporting points
should be the basis for your body paragraphs, and that relationship should be reflected
in the topic sentences for each paragraph. Topic sentences should perform three
func
tions: state the overall main idea, cover one of the three supporting points, and act
as a transition between paragraphs.
II. Body paragraph 1, topic sentence 1: “Parents
often have to “make it work” under difficult circumstances by being patient.III. Body
para. 2, topic sentence 2: “Parents often have to “make it work” under difficult
circumstances not only by being patient, but by being flexible as well.
IV. Body para.
3, topic sentence 3:
Parents often have to “make it work” under difficult
circumstance
s by being patient and flexible; they also have to make the most of the
resources they have available to them.
In addition, you were required to use at least
one outside source other than your chosen essay, so be sure to visit the Ashford
Library to find m
ore academic sources to add to your essay.
In terms of academic
voice, keep in mind that first and second person usage (I, me, my, us, we, our, you,
etc.) is prohibited in academic writing. You must write exclusively in third
person.
Lastly, be sure to r
eview the grammar, style, and proofreading errors I
pointed out, and work on those moving forward. Remember that you can submit drafts
of your work to the Writing Center for additional help in these areas before turning
them in for a grade.
Otherwise, I en
joyed reading your draft and look forward to
seeing your progress!Jamie
(1.76 / 2.00); : Develops a Workable Rough Draft from the Week 2 Outline, Demonstrating Progression in the Steps of the
Writing Process
Proficient
–
Develops a workable rough draft&n
bsp;from the Week 2 outline. The
rough draft is slightly underdeveloped, demonstrating some progression in the steps of
the writing process.
(1.76 / 2.00); : States Details About What is Most Important in the Selected Reading and the Topic That it Explores
Proficient
–
States details about the selected reading and the topic that it explores, but
not all are what is important in the reading. Min
or details are missing or slightly
unclear.
(3.52 / 4.00); : Composes an Argument in Response to Topic of the Selected Essay, and Supports the Response with
Examples and at Least One Quote and One Paraphrase from the Selected Essay
Proficient
–
Composes an
argument in response to topic of the selected essay, and
supports the response with examples and at least one quote and one paraphrase from
the selected essay. The argument is slightly underdeveloped or unclear.
This is a good start, so far. You have some good ideas going here in your rough draft,
and you made some interesting points about your chosen essay. You also put forth a
good effort on your thesis statement, in terms of its structure,but please see my
comments about eliminating the “announcing” part of it and any other self-referential
phrase. Also, you didn’t quite follow through on using it effectively as the
organizational structure of your essay. Remember that the three supporting points
should be the basis for your body paragraphs, and that relationship should be reflected
in the topic sentences for each paragraph. Topic sentences should perform three
functions: state the overall main idea, cover one of the three supporting points, and act
as a transition between paragraphs. II. Body paragraph 1, topic sentence 1: “Parents
often have to “make it work” under difficult circumstances by being patient.III. Body
para. 2, topic sentence 2: “Parents often have to “make it work” under difficult
circumstances not only by being patient, but by being flexible as well. IV. Body para.
3, topic sentence 3: Parents often have to “make it work” under difficult
circumstances by being patient and flexible; they also have to make the most of the
resources they have available to them. In addition, you were required to use at least
one outside source other than your chosen essay, so be sure to visit the Ashford
Library to find more academic sources to add to your essay. In terms of academic
voice, keep in mind that first and second person usage (I, me, my, us, we, our, you,
etc.) is prohibited in academic writing. You must write exclusively in third
person. Lastly, be sure to review the grammar, style, and proofreading errors I
pointed out, and work on those moving forward. Remember that you can submit drafts
of your work to the Writing Center for additional help in these areas before turning
them in for a grade. Otherwise, I enjoyed reading your draft and look forward to
seeing your progress!Jamie
(1.76 / 2.00); : Develops a Workable Rough Draft from the Week 2 Outline, Demonstrating Progression in the Steps of the
Writing Process
Proficient – Develops a workable rough draft from the Week 2 outline. The
rough draft is slightly underdeveloped, demonstrating some progression in the steps of
the writing process.
(1.76 / 2.00); : States Details About What is Most Important in the Selected Reading and the Topic That it Explores
Proficient – States details about the selected reading and the topic that it explores, but
not all are what is important in the reading. Minor details are missing or slightly
unclear.
(3.52 / 4.00); : Composes an Argument in Response to Topic of the Selected Essay, and Supports the Response with
Examples and at Least One Quote and One Paraphrase from the Selected Essay
Proficient -Composes an argument in response to topic of the selected essay, and
supports the response with examples and at least one quote and one paraphrase from
the selected essay. The argument is slightly underdeveloped or unclear.
