First Draft Self-Evaluation and Reflection
Part of the writing process is reviewing, revising, and editing your work. While your instructor is grading your essay this week, you will also review and reflect on your writing.
Review the Revising and Editing your Paper section of The Writing Process media piece.
Access and complete the “First Draft Self-Evaluation and Reflection” worksheet. This assignment will walk you through the writing process steps of self-evaluation and reflection.
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Topic 5: First Draft Self-Evaluation and Reflection
Part 1: Revising and Editing
Directions:
1. Go through each section below and self-evaluate your first draft by checking if you did or did not complete the task.
You do not need instructor feedback from your first draft to complete this worksheet.
2. If you did not complete the task, give a brief explanation of why.
Revising and Editing Overall Tips
Is your paper double spaced?
Yes or No:
Have you printed out a copy to read over?
Yes or No:
Did you visually scan your paper for paragraph length? Paragraphs that are either too long or shorter than the others may need some revision.
Yes or No:
Have you read your paper aloud to catch errors?
Yes or No:
Have you given your paper to a friend/instructor/CLA tutor to review?
Yes or No:
Revising
Did you reread the assignment details?
Yes or No:
Now that you have a draft, is your thesis statement clear, limited, and interesting, and is it supported in your draft?
Yes or No:
Does your thesis statement contain a main point and three subtopics?
Yes or No:
Are all your sources cited correctly? Does each parenthetical citation have a matching entry on the Reference page?
Yes or No:
Does every entry on the Reference page have matching parenthetical references?
Yes or No:
Review your introduction. Do you have a strong hook that engages the reader?
Yes or No:
Review the conclusion. Does it sum up your main points and restate the thesis?
Yes or No:
Paragraph Revisions
Does each paragraph have a strong topic sentence?
Yes or No:
Do all sentences support the topic sentence?
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Is the paragraph organized logically?
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Do the sentences transition smoothly and logically?
Yes or No:
Is each paragraph supported with sufficient details, examples, statistics, facts, research?
Yes or No:
Editing
Did you correct suggestions made by your word processing programs spell check and grammar check?
Yes or No:
What errors have teachers most corrected on your past papers? Did you check for those same errors on this paper?
Yes or No:
Did you check for some of the most common errors in your paper? Answer Yes or No:
Comma splices/Run-ons:
Sentence Fragments:
Subject/verb agreement:
Faulty parallelism:
Misplaced commas:
Misused colons, semicolons:
Commonly confused words (for example- there, their):
Are there any words that you use repeatedly in your paper?
Consider word choice. Can you identify any sentences/phrases which are awkward and need to be rephrased?
Could your sentence structure use more variety?
Part 2: Strengths and Weaknesses
Directions: Go through each component description below. Then give a brief explanation of what you did well, what you can improve upon, and your reasoning why
all boxes must be complete.
Organization:
Proper heading in the upper left hand corner, five separated paragraphs, Reference Page
What was done well:
What can be improved upon:
Reasons why:
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Research
: Proper topic that is supported with a peer reviewed article (research is included through in-text citations/paraphrased information from article(s)
What was done well:
What can be improved upon:
Reasons why:
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Conventions/Mechanics:
Proof-read entire paper, no spelling, punctuation, or grammatical errors; double-spaced throughout entire paper; paragraphs indented; references are listed correctly on reference page; minimum word count has been met and maximum word count has not been exceeded
What was done well:
What can be improved upon:
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Word Choice:
Academic writing is met, correct words used in context; essay contains a variety of sentence structures and uses complete, detailed expressions within the writing. *No incomplete, incoherent, or fragment sentences are found.
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What can be improved upon:
Reasons why:
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Voice/Tone:
Essay is written in 3rd Person Point of View (there is no I statements in the writing); message is clear and original in thought from the writers perspective on the topic and arguments (research is only there to support these claims).
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Sentence/Paragraph Fluency:
There is a smooth transitioning between paragraphs; sentences within the body paragraphs flow and are easy to read and follow; there is an unison of the topic chosen and the arguments presented in the essay; research enhances the paragraphs, and does not take the majority of the paragraph itself-again, research is to support, not create the essay.
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Part 3: Summary and Reflection
Directions: Please write a summary based on the guidelines given below; write your summary in the space provided.
In 250-300 words answer the following:
After reviewing your strengths and weaknesses, what will you do the same and what will you do differently when completing your next college essay?
What are some resources that you can use to help improve your areas of weakness?
What advice would you give a new student to help with writing their first college essay?
Summary:
2016. Grand Canyon University. All Rights Reserved. Running Head: BULLYING 1
BULLYING 2
Bullying
Name: LaCretia Daniels Comment by Nicole Denniston: LaCretia – great job on your first draft! You have some valuable information that is on topic, organized, and supported with peer-reviewed researched information. Please go through this for additional comments and feedback for changes to make for your final draft and for edits you may need to make yourself based on the rubric. Let me know if you have any questions about the feedback. Keep up the great work!
Course name: UNV-104
Date: August 23, 2020
Instructors Name: Nicole Denniston Comment by Nicole Denniston: In your essay, if I spot something I will provide a comment. However, I will only make that comment once. This will give you a chance to spot and edit the same mistakes in your paper to help with your proofreading skills.
Bullying
Bullying has been termed as a worldwide activity that does not affect only the person being bullied but also the person who carries out the event. In recent years, the incidences of bullying have significantly increased (Bond et al., 2016). The cases of bullying in the past five years have escalated by almost 30%. This figure is inclusive of people who have been either bullied face to face or via online platforms. While bullying has always been problematic among children, the short- and long-term effects of it are significantly worse. Some of the most profound ways that bullying can affect children are causing them to performpoorly in school, have and exhibit low self-esteem, and isolating themselves from others. Comment by Nicole Denniston: Great job on your hook and background information. Comment by Nicole Denniston: Good job having this mapped, but it looks like the order of your sub-topics here are not in the same order as your body paragraph information. This needs to be revised. These two things need to mirror each other.
Among the effects that results from bullying are that the child would develop low self-esteem, they won’t have confidence in whatever they do, and to some extent, might even experience self-criticism. The first effect of bullying on the self-esteem of a kid is that it makes the kid develop self-doubt and to some extend also lost the confidence they had in themselves (Jones et al., 2017). In most cases, the child ends up feeling that they are not good enough in whatever they do. However, a close look at the whole situation would show that the kid who is being bullied has a talent that the bully admires, and therefore, the bully tries all the means to belittle their target. When a kid experiences such incidences, they end up doubting their capabilities to perform certain things. If a child is continuously squashed about something, they end up believing that it is correct. When the kids are put down on something that they cannot change, for instance, their skin colour, it becomes more harmful to their self-esteem. It is here where the child would develop self-blame that in turn, would lead to self- criticism. Comment by Nicole Denniston: Great points here!
Bullying has also been associated with causing kids to experience social isolation. In most cases, it leads to depression and anxiety among the kids. With this, the risk of the kids withdrawing from their families also increases (Fisher et al., 2017). It is true that although bullying results in some effects and damages, the kid would eventually heal, there are circumstances that would result in long term effects. One of the most prevalent side effect depression, which if not correctly managed, could result in long term issues that might be severe. The kids that are at a higher risk of developing depression include those that have been bullied either verbally or physically. Outwardly, the kid may eventually seem to recover from the attacks. However, the mental scars may linger for months and possibly years. Some kids already suffer from anxiety even before the problem of bullying commences. It has been estimated that about two to twelve per cent of the adolescents suffer from anxiety and when this is combined with bullying the situation becomes worse and sometimes even difficult to manage. Wrap up. Comment by Nicole Denniston: Per your thesis statement this body paragraph should be about academic issues. Comment by Nicole Denniston: Great job on research! Comment by Nicole Denniston: Good! Where did you get this information from? It needs to be cited.
When doing an in-text citation that is paraphrased, it needs to be formatted as (Author last name, year). i.e. (Smith, 2012). OR According to Smith (2012) paraphrased information here.
Use this website to help you format your in-text citations correctly.
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/560/03/
Lastly, the other effect of bullying is that it can result in poor performance in school of the kids that are involved in the act. When a child is being bullied in school, it will automatically become difficult for them to be able to concentrate on their studies. Firstly, the children who have been bullied will hardly attend their classes because they want to avoid having an encounter with the person bullying them. For teenagers, they might choose to stay at home while the kids, in most cases, may pretend to be ill so that their parents or guardians would permit them not to attend school. Once the child misses several classes, it means that they would lag with the syllabus, and as a result, their performance would also be affected (Zequino et al., 2017). Next, the performance of the student’s would decrease as the learners would be unable to attend most of their classes, and hence they won’t be getting their assignments done well or even submitted on time. They are also likely to miss some essential data that is given by their teachers during the lectures. These kids would not be able to do as many assignments as their counterparts who are have been attending all the talks. Comment by Nicole Denniston: Great job on topic sentences! Comment by Nicole Denniston: Great!
In conclusion, it can be noted that bullying has indeed risen over the past few years, and it has, therefore, become a matter that needs to be given more attention. Bullying has a tremendous effect on the life of a school going kid as the child’s self-esteem tends to be lowered. The school performance of the kid in school would also drop as a result of bullying (Zequino, 2017). There is also a high probability that the child might withdraw from their families, and this is an indication that the child is actually under depression. There is also the possibility of the kid shying away from doing most of the activities that they enjoy doing because they have developed self-doubt. Bullying also has an effect of lowering the self-esteem of an individual. Furthermore, the child may end up lacking self-confidence. There are also some incidences where bullying students would end up blaming themselves for going through the situations, and as a result, they might experience self-criticism. It would, therefore, be vital, if bullying was considered a severe problem for kids and given the attention it deserves so that it can be reduced. Comment by Nicole Denniston: Great job on your conclusion in wrapping up your paper, and having a restatement of your sub-topic points.
References Comment by Nicole Denniston: Make sure these are in all black font; they look gray. Otherwise, excellent job having these in APA format and style!
Bond, R., Rothmund, T., & Gollwitzer, M. (2016). Mutual long-term effects of school bullying, victimization, and justice sensitivity in adolescents.Journal of Adolescence,48, 62-72.
Fisher, K., Cassidy, B., & Mitchell, A. M. (2017). Bullying: effects on school-aged children, screening tools, and referral sources.Journal of community health nursing,34(4), 171-179.
Jones, A., Robinson, E., Oginni, O., Rahman, Q., & Rimes, K. A. (2017). Anxiety disorders, gender nonconformity, bullying and selfesteem in sexual minority adolescents: Prospective birth cohort study. Journal of Child Psychology and Psychiatry, 58(11), 1201-1209.
Zequino, M. A., Cardoso, A. A., da Silva, J. L., de Medeiros, P., Silva, M. A. L., Pereira, B., & Cardoso, F. L. (2017). Academic performance and bullying in socially vulnerable students.Journal of Human Growth and Development,27(1), 19-27.
